Dyatlov - CANCELED STORY

It's still dawn and i think all of us are ready. we have rechecked all the food supplies and i'm sure it's more than enough until we reach our destination. we've planned that we will reach Otorten not more than 12 February. 1-2 weeks walking trough the categories 3 mountain route -which is the most difficult track- , will be more than tough i guess. 

but despite of all challenge, hitch and fear that all of us felt, Igor Alekseievich Dyatlov, our hike group leader really looks calm, cool, independent and mature to us.. umm.. or maybe it's only me..? hehe whatever.. i have a heart to him tough..
um.. by the way, my name is ZInaida. im 22 this year, and for me, it's the best age to do a thousand of great extreme adventure. maybe this is also what all my teammates thought.  we're all about the same age and quite experienced in long ski tours and mountain expedition. this is our golden age.

CHANGE:

It's already dark and i think all of us are exhausted. i have rechecked all the food supplies and i'm sure it will still be enough until we reach our destination. we've planned that we will reach Otorten not more than 12 February. 3 days walked trough the categories 3 mountain route -which is the most difficult track- , is really more than tough. 

but despite of all challenge, hitch and fear that all of us felt, Igor Alekseievich Dyatlov, our hike group leader really looks calm, cool, independent and mature to us.. he really able to control the situation even we know we're lost in our way now..umm.. or maybe it's only me..? hehe whatever.. i have a heart to him tough..
um.. by the way, my name is ZInaida. im 22 this year, and for me, it's the best age to do a thousand of great extreme adventure. maybe this is also what all my teammates thought.  we're all about the same age and quite experienced in long ski tours and mountain expedition. this is our golden age.

i saw Dyatlov, trying to recheck and recheck where actually we are. but the little disappointment in his face that covered by the goggles, couldn't trick us about the fact that we have to prepare to stay  over night somewhere at this point. the weather also doesn't in it's cooperative condition for us. Rustem, Dyatlov best friend mention that we have to find a place to build out tent right away, because it's getting late and the weather going to be worsen. dyatlov agrees and in minutes we have build our tent.

UNFORTUNATELY MY IDEA GOT REJECTED. so this story is CANCELED.

A Story from A True Events

The True Events:


The Dyatlov Pass Incident
Genre: Horror, Science Fiction, Mystery.


Short Brief:

The Dyatlov Pass incident refers to an event that resulted in the deaths of nine ski hikers in the northern Ural mountains on the night of February 2, 1959. It happened on the east shoulder of the mountain Kholat Syakhl (Холат Сяхл) (a Mansi name, meaning Mountain of the Dead). The mountain pass where the incident occurred has since been named Dyatlov Pass (Перевал Дятлова) after the group's leader, Igor Dyatlov (Игорь Дятлов). The lack of eyewitnesses has inspired much speculation. Soviet investigators determined only that "a compelling unknown force" had caused the deaths. Access to the area was barred for skiers and other adventurers for three years after the incident. The chronology of the incident remains unclear due to the lack of survivors.

Investigators at the time determined that the hikers tore open their tent from within, departing barefoot into heavy snow and a temperature of −30°C. Though the corpses showed no signs of struggle, two victims had fractured skulls, two had broken ribs, and one was missing her tongue. Their clothing, when tested, was found to be highly radioactive.

Characters and Backgrounds:

A group was formed for a ski trek across the northern Urals in Sverdlovsk Oblast (Свердло́вская о́бласть). The group, led by Igor Dyatlov, consisted of eight men and two women. Most were students or graduates of Ural Polytechnical Institute (Уральский Политехнический Институт, УПИ), now Ural State Technical University:

1. Igor Alekseievich Dyatlov (Игорь Алексеевич Дятлов), the group's leader, born January 13, 1936
2. Zinaida Alekseievna Kolmogorova (Зинаида Алексеевна Колмогорова), born January 12, 1937
3. Ludmila Alexandrovna Dubinina (Людмила Александровна Дубинина), born January 11, 1936
4. Alexander Sereievich Kolevatov (Александр Сергеевич Колеватов), born November 16, 1934
5. Rustem Vladimirovich Slobodin (Рустем Владимирович Слободин), born January 11, 1936
6. Yuri Alexeievich Krivonischenko (Юрий Алексеевич Кривонищенко), born February 7, 1935
7. Yuri Nikolaievich Doroshenko (Юрий Николаевич Дорошенко), born January 12, 1938
8. Nicolai Vasilievich (Vladimirovich?) Tibo-Briniolle (Николай Васильевич (Владимирович?) Тибо-Бриньоль), born June 5, 1935
9. Alexander Alexandrovich Zolotariov (Александр Александрович Золотарёв), born February 2, 1921
10. Yuri Yefimovich Yudin (Юрий Ефимович Юдин), born 1937

The goal of the expedition was to reach Otorten (Отортен), a mountain 10 kilometers north of the site of the incident. This route, at that season, was estimated as "Category III", the most difficult. All members were experienced in long ski tours and mountain expeditions.

The group arrived by train at Ivdel (Ивдель), a city at the center of the northern province of Sverdlovsk Oblast on January 25. They then took a truck to Vizhai (Вижай) - the last inhabited settlement so far north. They started their march towards Otorten from Vizhai on January 27. The next day, one of the members (Yuri Yudin) was forced to go back because of illness. The group now consisted of nine people.

Diaries and cameras found around their last camp made it possible to track the group's route up to the day preceding the incident. On January 31, the group arrived at the edge of a highland area and began to prepare for climbing. In a woody valley they cached surplus food and equipment which would be used for the trip back. The following day (February 1), the hikers started to move through the pass. It seems they planned to get over the pass and make camp for the next night on the opposite side, but because of worsening weather conditions, snowstorms and decreasing visibility, they lost their direction and deviated west, upward towards the top of Kholat Syakhl. When they realized their mistake, the group decided to stop and set up camp there on the slope of the mountain.

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It had been agreed beforehand that Dyatlov would send a telegraph to their sports club as soon as the group returned to Vizhai (Вижай). It was expected that this would happen no later than February 12, but when this date had passed and no messages had been received, there was no reaction—delays of a few days were common in such expeditions. Only after the relatives of the travelers demanded a rescue operation did the head of the institute send the first rescue groups, consisting of volunteer students and teachers, on February 20. Later, the army and police forces became involved, with planes and helicopters being ordered to join the rescue operation.

On February 26, the searchers found the abandoned tent on Kholat Syakhl. The tent was badly damaged. A chain of footprints could be followed, leading down towards the edge of nearby woods (on the opposite side of the pass, 1.5 km north-east), but after 500 meters they were covered with snow. At the forest edge, under a large old cedar, the searchers found the remains of a fire, along with the first two bodies, those of Yuri Krivonischenko and Yuri Doroshenko, shoeless and dressed only in their underwear. Between the cedar and the camp the searchers found three more corpses—Dyatlov, Zina Kolmogorova and Rustem Slobodin—who seemed to have died in poses suggesting that they were attempting to return to the tent. They were found separately at distances of 300, 480 and 630 meters from the cedar tree.

Searching for the remaining four travelers took more than two months. They were finally found on May 4, under four meters of snow, in a ravine in a stream valley further into the wood from the cedar tree.

Investigation:

A legal inquest had been started immediately after finding the first five bodies. A medical examination found no injuries which might have led to their deaths, and it was concluded that they had all died of hypothermia. One person had a small crack in his skull, but it was not thought to be a fatal wound.

An examination of the four bodies which were found in May changed the picture. Three of them had fatal injuries: the body of Thibeaux-Brignolle had major skull damage, and both Dubunina and Zolotarev had major chest fractures. According to Dr. Boris Vozrozhdenny, the force required to cause such damage would have been extremely high. He compared it to the force of a car crash. Notably, the bodies had no external wounds, as if they were crippled by a high level of pressure. One woman was found to be missing her tongue. There had initially been some speculation that the indigenous Mansi people might have attacked and murdered the group for encroaching upon their lands, but investigation indicated that the nature of their deaths did not support this thesis; the hikers' footprints alone were visible, and they showed no sign of hand-to-hand struggle.

Though the temperature was very low (around −25° to −30°C) with a storm blowing, the dead were dressed only partially. Some of them had only one shoe, while others had no shoes or wore only socks. Some were found wrapped in snips of ripped clothes which seemed to be cut from those who were already dead. However, up to 25 percent of hypothermia deaths are associated with so-called "Paradoxical undressing". This typically occurs during moderate to severe hypothermia, as the person becomes disoriented, confused, and combative. They may begin discarding their clothing, which, in turn, increases the rate of heat loss.

Journalists reporting on the available parts of the inquest files claim that it states:

• Six of the group members died of hypothermia and three of fatal injuries.
• There were no indications of other people nearby apart from the nine travelers on Kholat Syakhl, nor anyone in the surrounding areas.
• The tent had been ripped open from within.
• The victims had died 6 to 8 hours after their last meal.
• Traces from the camp showed that all group members left the camp of their own accord, on foot.
• To dispel the theory of an attack by the indigenous Mansi people, Dr. Boris Vozrozhdenny stated that the fatal injuries of the three bodies could not have been caused by another human being, "because the force of the blows had been too strong and no soft tissue had been damaged".
• Forensic radiation tests had shown high doses of radioactive contamination on the clothes of a few victims.

The final verdict was that the group members all died because of a "compelling unknown force". The inquest ceased officially in May 1959 due to the "absence of a guilty party". The files were sent to a secret archive, and the photocopies of the case became available only in the 1990s, with some parts missing.

Mind Your Language

Mind Your Language

One Sentence Summary:

Jeremy Brown a new Teacher that employed in an English Institution to teach English as a foreign language got a challenge from the college Principal be able to survive teaching a number of international students which each of the individual got problem with the other student caused by Accent, politics, and Nationality problems.

Characters:

1. Mr. Jeremy Brown, - The Teacher of the Class - British

2. Ms. Dolores Courtney - The Principal of the College - British

3. Ali Nadeem - Unemployed, The Students- Pakistan, Lahore

4. Giovanni Capello, - Chef, The Students - Italian

5. Anna Schmidt - Au pair, The Students - Germany

6. Chung Su-Lee - Secretary at Chinese Embassy, The Students - Chinese

7. Taro Nagazumi - Japanese Electronics representative, The Students - Japanese

8. Jamila Ranjha - Indian Housewife, The Students - India, Simla

9. Maximilian Andrea Archimedes Papandrious - Shipping office worker, The Students - Greek, Athens

10. Juan Cervantes - Bartender, The Students - Spanish

11. Ranjeet Singh - London Underground worker, The Students - India, Punjab

12. Danielle Favre - Au Pair, The Students - French

Character Bio:

1. Mr. Jeremy Brown

The English teacher in the college, he holds the B.A.from Oxford University. in most of the scene, he's the main character in this story or you could say he's the vocal point of it. before he up to the job, the principal of the college warn him about the teacher before him that goes insane because couldn't take the pressure from the class. Mr. Jeremy took the challenge and  tried his best to do his work. the thing is, after his first lesson he already felt the pressure from the students and warn himself not to got crazy by it.

2. Ms Dolores Courtney
She's the principal of the college, she's a very strict and cynical lady. she refuses the title Mrs when Mr. Brown called her because she haven't married. she's tight-fisted principal. she always think that women always could so something better than a man, that's why she thinks poorly of Mr. Brown and his abilities.

3. Ali Nadeem
Nadeem is a very nice student, he smiles all the time and have a quite good basic English, even though he still couldn't understand some complicated vocabulary, not pretty well with pronunciation and couldn't understand some question told by the teacher. he's unemployed guy and only took his dole every week for his survival supply. he's originated from Lahore, Pakistan and he grew up in Delhi.

4. Giovanni Capello
Giovanni is Italian , he work as a chef and one of the loudest in class. he have conflict wit Max in fight over Danielle. when shocked, stressed, or surprised he usually shout "Santa Maria" or "Holy Ravioli".

5. Anna Schmidt
She come from German, and really have a pro minded about her country. she prefer to "German Efficiency". she usually punctuates her sentence with German Words.

 6. Chung Su-Lee
a Chinese girl working as secretary at a Chinese Embassy, she has a very energetic, firm and active personality. she has quite good basic English but seen from her personality, i guess she still want to make her English become more perfect. that's why she entered that class.

 7. Taro Nagazumi
an aged man that works as a Japanese electronics representative. he had a reasonable command of English but his Japanese accent is still very strong. same as Su-Lee and Anna, he's also a very proud man for his country, Japan.

 8. Jamila Randja
Jamila come from india, she has a very terrible understanding of english (even it's like nothing she understand) she seen in the class with her knitting tools and hardly trying to speak to the teacher.

 9. Maximilian Andrea Archimedes Papandrious

Max is a Greek shipping office worker from Athens, same as Giovanni, he also have a very flirty eyes to Danielle, that's why in his first lesson he often fight with Giovanni trying to grab Danielle attention. same as the others, he also have a very heavy accent in his English conversation.

 10. Juan Cervantes

Spanish bartender, optimistic and powerful spirit shown from the way he talks. the thing is, he have the same level of English as Jamila. pathetic. the always says "por favor" (please) when he reply's the teacher's conversation because he doesn't know how to answer him at all. Luckily, Giovanni was there to help the teacher talks to him.

 11. Ranjeet Singh

he's a London Underground worker from India, Punjab. he says that he's a devout Sikh and hates Pakistani Muslim so much that's why he constantly argue with Ali Nadim. he has a good vocabulary and a very polite attitude to Mr Brown, the teacher.

  

 12. Danielle Favre

she's the Madonna of the class, Danielle is the prettiest, sexiest, and the most charming girl in that class. that's why almost all of the male student's get attracted to her, specially Giovanni and Max including Mr. Brown the teacher himself.

What makes a good story?

A good Story created from crisis condition minded, spontaneously thought and creative brainstorm. the theme and idea of the story could come from anywhere, anytime and from anybody. and trough all of those elements, comes couple characters that has most unique characteristic that's different from other stories, which attract reader to know them better and fall in love for them.

not only about the character, plot and story line also has the most important element of the story. story could be told without any characters, but there are no stories without plot and story line. what's happening? why? what will happened? what's the solving method for the problems?

So let's put all those element into the point
WHAT MAKES A GOOD STORY?
1. Motive
2. Conflict (Drama)
3. Quest
4. Turning Point
5. Climax
6. Resolution
7. Characters
8. Emotion

there are also some other important point when you want to make a good story, such as:

GENRES: with this element, you start planning about the target audience of your story, is is going to be horror story? action? adventure? or is it love story? you can even combine about 2 to 3 genre into one story depends with the way you've planed it.
BRAINSTORM: is the most important point about your story. make your story become more interesting with it, solve all the problem that you find wrong inside your story, twist it and plan it as well as possible.
1 SENTENCE PITCH: will become your attracting point of the story that you write. this is what will sell your story and make people reads about it.
and the last, 3ACT STRUCTURE: the way you plans your story needs to have some structure and planning. write it down in some graphic point so you will think it more easy and tidy.

These all items isn't all of the elements that makes story turn more interesting and perfect. there are more to be explore to make a better and better story. because just as same as Art, story also doesn't has any limit in the way you develop it.

So keep reading, writing, and LEARNING more about it if you want to make more and more great story.

The Romantic Warrior Script - Draft 3

FADE IN:

SCENE 1: INT – HOUSE – DAWN

PRESENT - 1970

It is still dawn, where dog’s barks and bird’s chirps are still softly heard at the outside of the house.  Kim and Nick sit next to each other in the guess room. Kim cries, and she holding something very tight in her hands. Her sobbing reverberates to all over the room. It’s a very silent Moring.

SCENE 2: INT – HOUSE – DAY

FLASHBACK - 1955

HUNG (VO)

Sigh.. Looking through all the entire past photo,

 Where you still young,

Both your parent’s still alive,

The first time meet your future wife

-Where unbelievably she destined to study at the same school as yours,-

And be the one who able to attract her, seeing the fact that she was an idol back then,

[the scene showing the photograph one by one]

  is not a very nice feeling where you realize you have to leave her just by the next one hour. And maybe, forever.

SCENE 3: INT – HOUSE – DAWN

FLASH BACK - 1952

Hung and Kim had their afternoon walk near one river besides their town.

HUNG

“I cannot believe that war is the best solution. No one won the last war and no one will win the next.”..One of the best quotes I ever heard.

Hm.. anyway, My name is PAM HÙNG DUNG, “HÙNG” which means Heroic and “DUNG” which means Brave, really does not describe my personality best...  err..i dunno why, but a lot of people in Vietnam want to have a name same as mine, maybe because they think if you had a great name it will be awesome when you became a hero in war..? 

HUNG

(Hung took one lotus flower from the river, he cleans it and giving it to Kim)

KIM

(Questioning what is he doing)

HUNG

Kim, do you love me? (While holding the flower toward her)

KIM

(Blushing and feels that Hung teases her)

HUNG

(Small laugh)

Since today, this lotus, will became my sign of love to you. i know that there will come our hard time and when everything goes wrong,

 i hope this lotus resemble everything from my heart. Where I hope, you will understand it deeply.

And the other reason is because I don’t know how to show this huge love inside me any other way..(Giggling). 

Kim face turned very red where at the end, she punched Hung’s stomach very hard. (like: “BUGHH!!!!”), Hung face showing that he’s in deep Hurt, Hung kneel at the ground and trying to catch any breath and bear with the pain.

Kim runs away from him because she’s very embarrassed. But confusedly she return back to Hung and help hung stand back. Then Kim hugs Hung.

                        Kim: I love you.. thanks..

  

They got their first kiss there.

(Camera focusing on the lotus, where the back ground softly fading from that time to the present. The other lotus in Hung’s present home.)

SCENE 4: INT – HOUSE – DAY

1955

Hung took two pictures from that photo album. First is his wedding photograph, and second is his past family photo. When he, his mother, his father and his brothers still together.

Then he puts it inside his bag pack while Kim, his wife stare him deeply in sorrow from the distance.

HUNG

(Done with his packing, and walk towards Kim. they stand facing each other. He then tries to look Kim in the eye.)  

KIM

(Throw away her eye contact)

HUNG

(Touch Kim’s chin and direct her eyes to his)

They make a very deep eye contact and then Hugging and kissing each other. Kim cried, she tries to hold her tears but nothing can against the sadness pressure for a moment like that. 

HUNG

(He gives Kim one lotus flower that he hides behind his back.)

This.. won’t be my last flower to you..

Hopefully.. (Bitter smiles)

Please promise me one thing Kim.. Please wait for my return even I can’t promise it. I know I’m week, but I’ll try my best to survive for you..

Ok, my love..?

KIM

(holding her tears, and smiling while taking something inside her pocket. She then takes out one small handkerchief and give it to Hung)

I can only make this.. and I hope.. you’ll be the one that return this thing for me again.. ok hung..? I promise you I’ll wait for you..

HUNG

Yes.. yes I will, my love..

Then Hung and Kim did their last farewell. Hung went inside the Truck where it took them to the base camp where Hung soon will get his training. There are also a lot of other soldier who did the same farewell like Hung. They also did the farewell with their own families.

Hung never let go his eyes from his beloved wife. It’s the hardest farewell they ever did, where they know that there are no promise for them to be able to meet each other again.

HUNG (VO)

the farewell was the hardest. Probably because she aware that she should be the one who go to war better then me. And for the first time, i saw Kim cried in front of me. questioning that this strong hearted girl could drop her tears for me. 

Hah..i always remember how bitter and sweet that kiss was..The last kiss...

(The truck leaving the town, camera showing that the truck passing a plate Witten with the name of the town, Bee Enn Foo town)

SCENE 5: INT – THE CAMP – DAY

1955

HUNG (VO)

April 1955, suddenly everything turn into a hell..

i got trained to kill mankind, they brainwashed me to die for my country, and many more things that are illogical. Oh man, this thing’s to heavy for me. i really hate war. Really, really, hate. to be honest, i'm afraid of it and i better run away when it occurs. it's better for me to be a writer or a poet because i know i have a talent for it. Just like the way I got my wife. It’s all about words and heart. If we lived in the world where politicians are not the most influential people, but poets are, i would be the most influential guy in the world, i guess.

Hung went inside his tent grumbling and complains about the training he just gets, he didn’t like it very much.

HUNG

#$&^% with all those training!?? Do we really need to be that ripped??! Cih! #!#$%^#&&

Hung continuously mumbling until one mysterious box upon his resting place catch his attention.

HUNG

(He tries to open it, and seeing what inside of the box. The thing that he found is a set of camera with its complete property. Hung gets really curious about that new and modern thing for him and he tries to observe it even further.)

(Then, accidentally he opens the back of the camera where it contains the black film – which is very sensitive to light and can’t be opened in bright environments- of the photos. all the photos inside it were burned then without him knowing)

Suddenly Nick Ut, -the owner- comes in order to search for his bag that had been left behind.

NICK

(he shocked looking that Hung holding his camera with the back side opens widely)

Everything turns freezing, the situation become very awkward and no one can be blamed for it. Nobody’s right yet nobody’s wrong.

HUNG

Is this.. Yours…?

Camera’s zooming out of the camp, leaving the situation unfinished.

SCENE 6: EXT – WARZONE – EVENING

1959

Hung and Nick run together. Searching for any safety spot away from the epicenter of war. Nick always tries to encounter the war epicenter but Hung pulling him away from it. Sounds of blowing guns and missile continuously heard everywhere. Plane and helicopters fly all over the field and there are a lot of dead soldier’s bodies scattered all over the place.

[BOOMM..!! one of big missile explode 30 meters next to them.]

-5 seconds later-

[BOOOMM..!!!! another missile explode 10 meters next to them.]

HUNG
OH MY GOD!!

OH MY GOOOOODD..!!!

NICK

SHOOT..!! SHOOT!!!

JUST SHOOT..!!!!

HUNG

NO..!! MOVE MOVE MOVE..! LET’S MOVE SOMEWHERE ELSE!!

NO BODY WILL BE KILLED BY ME, OK?!!

NICK

 THEN WHAT ARE YOU TRAINING FOR??!!!

Suddenly one huge missile coming towards their standing spot.

HUNG

RUUUNNN!!!!!!!!! (Pulling Nick away)

HUNG (VO)

It’s been 3 years since the first time me and Nick meet. That awful encounter where you spoil one man’s creation and in the future, he became you best friend.

I and nick always go anywhere side by side. We became good friend since we can’t remember. Maybe you can say, he’s my only friend. I shared a lot of my background story, story about my town, family and also about Kim.

He also tells me about his background story. Quite a sad story where he raised not by his own parents but buy one photographer which turn into his mentor now. I think all of those pressures, break his mind. He’s a very crazy boy risking his live to go to war as a freelance photographer at this age.

He’s only 19!

my war start at 3 May 1959, at the border between South and North Vietnam. i couldn't do much during that war. Thanks to that, i survived for quite some time. some people say that the cowards could survive and that's what i am.

And to be honest, 3 years of my duty, i NEVER killed anyone. until that day comes when i have to choose between taking live or let my friend die.

Hung and nick still running away and looking for more safety spot. Away from those bullets and missiles, while Nick always trying to sneak for taking more picture of the glimpse of the war.

SCENE 7: INT – BATTLE GROUND/INSIDE THE FOREST – DUSK

1962

Nick and hung were trapped inside an ambush.

They are in constriction because all of their allies left them behind in order to become decoy for accomplishing a war strategy.  They’re considered as the invaluable troops.  

Sounds of buzzing guns screaming from every corner where they stand.  Lots of their friends died. Some screaming and crawling because of the great depression they had.  Bomb and missiles blowing everywhere.

NICK

Where is the backup..??

HUNG

I don’t know..!!

Guns firing around them, they get intimidated by the enemy.

Soldier

THEY LEFT US!!! THEY JUST G..!!(BANG!!!)

(He stops talking suddenly)

NICK

WHY HE STOP TALKING..??!!

HUNG

HE GOT SHOOT!!! We have to survive Nick!! Hide somewhere..!!!

Suddenly one injured and dying American enemy soldier run aimlessly trying to attack and killed anybody that stands on his way. He holding a bayonet, trying to killed anybody in his way.

NICK

(He trembles and can’t do anything, Nick were under the killing pressure so he becomes petrified. Nick is not a soldier, so he didn’t trained for it)

HUNG

(Stand up)

NICK!!! MOVE OUTT..!!!!!

HUNG (VO)

i saw that guy, i stood and screamed to Nick to run, but Nick couldn't hear me, he couldn't even move because of the killing pressure from that american guy.

Then, Hung stands up, and shoots the American soldier, the American soldier fall down and Nick has been saved.

HUNG (VO)

it was my first time shooting a person. I saw nick shocked face.  everything seemed to move slower and a thousand of emotional thoughts came into my mind. i smiled.

HUNG

AHA!!!! YOU OWN ME ONE NICK..!! hahah

NICK

Hung! Get d..!!!

[BANGG!!!! Another Gunshot blowing very near by the place Hung’s stand]

Suddenly everything went quiet. Hung touches his chest. Nick run into him, screaming.

HUNG (VO)

I felt… I felt something touch me.. Why nick’s face looks like crap..? Man.. He’s so ugly..

I.. got shoot..?

NICK

HUNG!!! HUNG!!!!!!

CAN YOU HEAR ME??!!

HUNG!! Answer!!

HUNG

My breath.. My breath’s hurt..

NICK

 (he starts swearing and crying, while trying to find any hiding spot.)

HUNG:

Nick.. can you give me a favor? (Coughing)

NICK

Yess hung.. ofcoure.. what is it?? (Crying)

stay with me Hung.. Stay with me

HUNG

please.. (Crawling to find his handkerchief inside his pocket)

find my wife… (Trying to breathing)

Please..Find her..(Putting the handkerchief that tainted by his blood into nick’s hand)

Give this.. give..to. her..

NICK

Yes ill find her hung, I promise, I promise.

(Nick holds Hung’s hand and prayed for him)

Zooming out from the place where Nick and Hung are hiding. Viewing the forest from top of it where all blast and explosion were able to seen.

HUNG (VO)

Yes.. and that’s how I died..the guy that really not meant for war. Weak yet romantic and talented, died not for his country, but for his friends.

SCENE 8: EXT– OOUTSIDE OF HUNG’S HOUSE – DAWN

1970

Nick arrives at Hung’s hometown. He looking around and trying to asked people for address and direction. He looks for Hung’s house.

Then, after he found the right house, he try to knocks and Kim is the one who opens the door for him.

NICK

Chau Hong Kim…?

KIM

Yes..? and you…?

NICK

Ah, Huỳnh Công Út, or just call me Nick Ut.

Hm….(with a lot of doubt Nick trying to take out the handkerchief away from his pocket)

When Nick give the handkerchief back to Kim, Kim understand clearly what have happened to his husband. And then, she burst into tears and crying out loud.

She realize that she has lost his most loved person and nothing will be able to bring him back to live.

FADE OUT.

- THE END -